click here:http://margaretnoble.net/blog/choral_top/ The sound sounded like someone was opening a can and then it started to sound like an accordion with some other instruments. And when you were hearing it the sound would relax you, also when you heard it was something that was never heard before. Today in school I heard it and it sounded like a knew sound mix.
I liked how you explained what you thought it sounded like a can being opened.It really gave us a clear picture of what it must have sounded like.I also liked how you referred to it as being a "new mix" you heard.
ReplyDeleteYou gave us very little information about the sound it self, and i thought you could have made it alot more interesting.Maybe by adding what you felt as you heard it, or by comparing it to noises you've heard before. You could have also explained what a can being opened soundes like, that way the reader could get a clearer picture of what you meant.Although i liked how you said that it was a relaxing sound, i thought you could have used more detail to better your writing.
Other that that, you have a good start :)
i liked it when you said that it sounded like an accordion. because i could imagine you just listening to that and hearing it because it relaxes you when you hear it. i liked how you described the sound as if someone was opening a can.and i also liked it when you said that the sound was like a new mix.
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