Hi my name is Rosaleen and im 16 years old. I have a friend name Lily she came over to my house to play with me. It was 9:00p.m I told Lily "i think you should call you mom because is late and she might be worry. And if you want you could spent the night in my house just ask your mom." Lily said "yeah i should" after Lily ask her mom we went to sleep. It was 7:00 o'clock I woke up. I went to the bathroom to brush my teeth after I finish I went to wake up Lily. We were getting ready for school.
I let lily borrow some close. After we finish getting ready we went downstairs to eat breakfast. After we finish we went to get our backpacks and we went outside and we jump in to the car. When we got to school first thing that we did was to look for our class. After we found it we went in and we had our first class. When school was over i went to look for Lily so we could go home. I found her so we went outside to wait for my dad.
After my dad pick us up we went to leave Lily to her house. Then we went back home we came and we eat because i was super super hungry. My phone ring so i went running to answer and it was Lily she ask me if I could help her in her homework and I told her sure. So she came over to my house again. After i finsh helping her she said "thanks for helping me" and I told her "your welcome" so she went back home. And after a long day I went to sleep.
I like how you made it seem like you and lily were friends, and how you said what you guys did.
ReplyDeletei LiKE THE WAy yOU WENT bACK iN TiME AND WROTE WHEN ROSALEEN WAS yOUNG iNSTEAd OF FOCUSiNG ON THE TIME PERiOd.
ReplyDeleteI like how you explained Rosaleen at the beginning and how you made her younger. Because if you didn't do that then i would be kind of lost because in the book she's not like that and stuff. And i like how you made the connection with Lily and her
ReplyDeletei liked how you put specific time points in your story and also how rosaleen and lily really made each other like they were sisters instead of friends :D
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